The Official Writing Challenge
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10/13/16
This is a unique story. A great analogy of Christ taking our burdens. God bless.
10/16/16
This is a wonderful read. The only typo I noticed was in the second line, 'alarmed' should probably read 'alarm'. Short, direct sentences kept the story moving at an escalating pace. Well done!
10/17/16
This is so creative and good take on topic. Well written.
10/17/16
a great analogy of God's love. well done!
10/17/16
Well written and very moving. A wonderful example of Christ's love for mankind.

I think you may have meant gasping for breath instead of rasping.

Thanks for sharing.
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