The Official Writing Challenge
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09/05/16
Your writing places you as the "forgiven villain", God as the grace-giver and your parents-in-law as His vessels. It's both heart-rending and heart-warming.
Paragraph one is a nice introduction - it places the reader in the location well.
Maybe you could look at the possible overuse of commas? There's good teaching on this on this site.
09/08/16
I liked the description of churches that freckle the coast. It was a sad story but you told it well.