The Official Writing Challenge
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08/15/16
I love your writing style. I was holding my breath as you described the trumpet's call.

There are commas in a few places that don't need them, and maybe a couple of other little punctuation oversights.

The dramatic end left me wondering if this young man was the "last procrastinator". I hope he was. :)
08/16/16
Good writing, very tense moments.
Congratulations on ranking 7th in your level. Happy Dance!