The Official Writing Challenge
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07/25/16
I thoroughly enjoyed your story with it’s delightful dialogue and humorous ending. You also made a great comparison between church and geese— a lot to consider there. Check out the third paragraph from the end--Did you intend for ol’ and cookin’ to continue to be in the dialogue dialect?
07/27/16
Interesting! I love the sound of geese honking overhead, too. This could be tightened a bit with less empty dialogue. Perhaps written from a goose's POV would have worked better.
I loved your joke at the end. I'll have to tell that to my grandson. He loves riddles.
Very good teaching in that carefully, and well written character sketch of Pa, son and a gaggle of geese.

I liked it.
10/16/16
Correct title spelling is Geese Gaggle