The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow, this is powerful. It wasn't what I thought it was going to be at first. I wonder if different people will take different messages from this depending on experiences. At first, I thought the bridge was a metaphorical one connecting this life to the next, but later saw the MC as someone who wanted to cross that bridge before his time. Many years ago, I rebelled about my lack of control in everything. I decided I could at least control when I died, but Jesus shook his head and said Sorry, that's in my hands as well. The doctors were amazed I survived, but Jesus still had plans for me. I needed that reminder again this week. Thanks for giving it to me.
My red ink is tiny, but you are missing quite a few possessive apostrophes like in Heaven's Gate, harbor's gale.

I think the words flowed nicely off the page. The rhymes came easily, and the words touched my heart.
This is wonderfully descriptive. You wove the words so well. I could feel the cold wind against my face.
Well done.
Congratulations on your EC! I'm so happy for you. Happy, happy Dance!
Congratulations on 8th Place Editor's Choice, and 1st Place in Advanced category. Woo Hoo for you!
Congratulations Daniel on your well deserved win! I'm not one for poetry but your gift is evident anyway you choose to write. God Bless
Congratulations, Daniel, for placing 1st place in the Advanced category and 8th place overall.

Your poem created several vivid images in my mind. Well done.
Congratulations, Daniel, on your EC place. Your poem is gripping and moving, with (thankfully) a happy ending. Well written!
I enjoyed the build up to a strong close. Congratulations on your EC.
You captured the mood of your MC in a lyrical and profound way.