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05/27/16
red ink: last para. I think most importantly shouldn't have an ly on the end. You wrote an interesting essay. I think you moved it along well.
05/27/16
Thanks for the delightful trip down memory lane. My pink hot pants flashed through my head when you planted the seed with your story.

It's as if you eloquently described the days of our youth, and contrasted with the days of today's youth.

Technology is a wonderful thing when used in moderation. I really liked your story. I felt a clearer transition between the good old days, and now a days, would have been helpful.

Great story. Nice job.
05/31/16
Loved this so much!

Blessings~
06/01/16
I really like this. It reminded me of the carefree days of my youth though I might have named it something different. The title didn't grab me, but I am glad I read it as it is very good.