The Official Writing Challenge
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04/21/16
Great message in this well written entry.

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04/25/16
I can feel your passion for this issue (and I share it). You got your message across quite clearly.

My only suggestion is to try to make the transitions between Tim's story and your facts and plea a bit more smooth. It tripped me up a bit when I went from one to the other.

Nicely done!
04/28/16
Congrats,
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