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Pi is certainly a social animal! But, I figured Pi was a dog, until the line about putting him/her down for a nap. I don't think I've ever seen anyone do that with a dog, so I got suspicious. ;) The only critique: I was a bit distracted by the changes from present to past tense, in some spots, so I'd recommend a bit of editing. Otherwise, this is a pleasure to read. I enjoyed the "characters" in your story. I could see this as an illustrated children's book!
I agree with Edy, this would make a wonderful children's book. It just has that feel and atmosphere.

The changing from past to present tense threw me a little as well and you don't introduce a 1st person narrative until the last few paragraphs, so that was a little disorienting as well.

Overall, though, the story gives off a nice soothing vibe with likable and interesting characters.

Nice job!
An enjoyable read. I too was a bit confused with the past and present tense usage. I even wondered if Pi was a human toddler. I did like the surprise at the end when it turns out she was a goat. Thanks for a delightful story about animals on a farm.
I loved this!

Well done...

I read this and thought I commented on it. Oh well. To me the suspense was waiting to find out who/what Pi was. You wrote in a nice smooth voice, one any age would enjoy reading. I miss days on the farm. This brought back fond memories. I really enjoyed this.