The Official Writing Challenge
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04/14/16
I like:

"But my troubles are so endless they’re eating up my mind.Yet I am redeemed again
God, you are so kind."

Red Ink: I noticed a few words that were either mispelled "crocked". Did you mean "crooked"? or in the wrong tense (past vs present).

Great message. Keep writing.
God Bless
You may have noticed that it is when we are "social" that we say or do the wrong things.

I liked the repeated lines in the first and last stanzas as well as in the title.

The rhyming words were well chosen and the length of the lines made it easy to read and understand your thoughts.
04/16/16
Beautiful job!

Blessings~
04/16/16
I thought this was beautiful and a clever way to use the topic. Nice job.