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03/10/16
Wonderful retelling of Mary at the tomb. The use of fragrances added a new dimension to the familiar story.
03/10/16
I liked the descriptions. I could almost smell the different scents. There were a couple of punctuation errors relating to quotation marks.
03/10/16
I liked the descriptions. I could almost smell the different scents. There were a couple of punctuation errors relating to quotation marks.
03/10/16
I could almost smell the fragrances. Red ink: there were a couple of errors in punctuation (relating to quotation marks).
03/11/16
Beautiful job with this lovely entry!

God bless~
03/15/16
This was beautiful. Mary's swollen eyes and headache; the images running past her closed eyes...these were very believable.
I was not quite at peace with the ending and I THINK it was because the comparison was between the literal smell of death and the non-literal, poetic "smell" of love. To be "ferhoodled" suggests to me that they both needed to be literal. However, I might just be missing something....
03/17/16
I really liked how you used your imagination to help us experience more of the emotion that Mary was likely having.

I have not attempted a retelling of a Bible story yet. Hopefully, when I do, I can do as well as you did with this.
It is helpful to illustrate how Bible characters feel to make them more real to us. This is a fun read. Thank you.
03/22/16
Congratulations on placing 7th place in the Advanced Category. I really appreciated all the detail of the spices and fragrances.
Congratulations on ranking 7th in your level. Happy Dance!
The disciples in my story were supposed to be John and Simon Peter instead of John and Paul.

After it was brought to my attention, I wanted to clarify my intentions.

I did not intentionally try to ferhoodle the readers.