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03/03/16
Sin does start in the heart. Your story showed how easily it is for jealousy or sin to grow and develop.
03/05/16
This was a good "spotlight" on temptation, jealousy and sin. It was well written, well laid out and easy to read.
If it helps, my personal reflection upon the scripture exposition in the middle was that it came just as the story had risen from a walk to a trot and was promising a gallop. I felt that the lesson might've been better at the end, as it seemed to interrupt the flow a bit.
However, others might disagree...and in either case, it was a good illustration of the principle.
03/05/16
Just so well said and done!

Great story and message.

Blessings~
03/08/16
I like this story! I can understand the earlier comment about the Scripture part interrupting the flow, but I actually liked it. It made the message of the last part more real because you could apply the Scripture to it.