The Official Writing Challenge
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This was a lovely story about a woman with a big heart. She worked tirelessly for the poor.

You may want to space in between paragraphs to make it more easy to read.

This fit the topic perfectly.

Well done.
Jenny has an amazing spirit.
A valuable example of tireless Christian commitment. My suggestions are to work on punctuation and separating out your paragraphs. I saw some places that needed commas and also some run-on sentences.
Keep up the good work.
God Bless
yes to everyone's comments; lovely story but needed severe proofing to catch punctuation errors, paragraphing etc.