The Official Writing Challenge
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02/19/16
What a life this woman had. I think her story requires more than a 750 word count can accommodate, but you have a good approach to the topic. You might want to rework the last sentence. Nice work!
God Bless
02/20/16
Eleanor was an inspirational missionary to China. What is her last name? I'd like to read her story.

I believe out-of-date is spelled out like this.
What a remarkable story of courage and faith. I was a little confused at the POV shift at the end of the story. I probably would have used second person instead of first person for an easier transition. Well Written.
This drew me in from the very beginning g. You had a great opener. I'll admit I was surprised to learn the setting wasn't in today's time. It took me off track for a minute. You may want to share that sooner. Once I recovered, I enjoyed the rest of the story. Nicely done.
02/25/16
Amazing woman. Indefatigable. In view of her struggles I find life far and away less challenging. Your story encourages to be grateful and not waste time. Nicely written. The red ink suggestions should elevate this to an amazing story.
02/25/16
Congratulations! Reading this over again, I appreciate even more the exceptional job you did. Well Done...again!
02/25/16
Congratulations, Pat, on your well-deserved highly commendable placing in the Advanced Category.

I think Eleanor's life was inspirational.
Pat, Congratulations on your highly commendable award in the Advanced division.