The Official Writing Challenge
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This piece made my mouth water. I could smell the aroma of the doughnuts.
I believe you meant to write "shut our doors" instead of shutter our doors.
I know in our tiny city that the doughnut shop was the local hangout of the police force.
02/14/16
This is a nice story with a happy ending, but the dialogue seems a bit too sugary. I do like how the police come in and save the business. That's a new twist.
This is a good story and so neat how it reflected current times! Pastry - delicious!
Be careful about expecting dialogue to carry the story. It makes for rough transitions. For example the police's request came out of thin air- the reader wasn't told he entered the shop. :)
02/18/16
Well done!

Blessings~
02/18/16
Loved it!
Congrats!
Blessings~
Congratulations on your third place win in the advanced category. Great job.
02/18/16
Congratulations on your 3rd place finish! I also admire your encouraging spirit toward other authors week after week. You and your writings are a blessing.
Yeah! Congrats!
Congratulations on ranking 3rd in your level and 29 overall. Happy Dance!
What a fun story, and true also. Congrats!