The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked the concept of the story of being a number instead of a name. The character BB was a real spitfire. I believe the idea if developed a little bit more could make it an even better story. I thought the ending ended a bit abruptly.
Very creative take on the topic this well written entry...I enjoyed it very much!

God bless~
I agree with a previous comment that it could be developed into an even better story. There were a couple of errors, either in grammar or typos, and it did end abruptly - perhaps due to word limit. I don't know.
I think you had a very good start that makes us want to hear more. More details throughout the story would be good. Also wanted to hear that the MC received salvation at the end. This could be developed into a good short story. Good work. Blessings, LaVonne
Very interesting read. I think it could be improved a little by showing the main character in a certain situation and giving us small bits of narrative information so we could gather her background. Having said that I really liked your style of writing and how you introduced BB.