The Official Writing Challenge
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01/21/16
I'm glad the MC found Prince Charming in the end.

There's nothing wrong with plain vanilla, but it's hard when boys at that age only notice the brighter flavors.
01/21/16
I thought you maintained the tension & mystery w/ Caleb well. Glad the coincidences didn't result in the expected ("vanilla") invite from him. The ending felt a bit like a tag-on rather than being integrated w/ the narrative -- like the closure info included at the end of many movies. While those aren't my favorite endings, yours wasn't too disjointed. Nice concise writing overall.
01/27/16
Nicely done!

God bless~
Congratulations on ranking 7th in your level and 24 overall! Happy Dance!
01/30/16
I liked your story very much even though it brought back sad memories of being passed over for a more "flavorful sort".

Your story is also a good reminder of how many times we try to take matters into our own hands rather than resting on God and waiting for his perfect timing.