The Official Writing Challenge
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This story is a haunting tale of what will happen if we don't accept Christ as Savior. This was on topic and thought provoking.
11/28/15
Graphic and cautionary material.
11/30/15
A tale of a most horrible reality for sure. Good take on topic.
Red ink: The beginning is a bit confusing. You hooked me with the first sentence, but then I didn't understand how the rest of the para. tied in.
12/01/15
Epic! Excellent work!

God bless~
This is a powerful story. It's full of vivid descriptions. It reminded me a bit of the parable of the rich man Lazarus who saw the begger, who huddled at his stoop in life, across the chasm with God. I think you did a nice job of bringing the story to life.
12/03/15
CONGRATULATIONS BONNIE!
Your win was well deserved.
God Bless,
Francie
Congratulations on your well-deserved win in the advanced division. Masterful use of words.
Congratulations on ranking 1st in level three and 11 overall! Happy Dance!
Congratulations, Bonnie. You have painted a vivid scene in this tale of regret.
12/03/15
Your images are tangible and you've creatively used the parable for this topic. Well done! Congrats, Bonnie, on your ribbon!