The Official Writing Challenge
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11/13/15
God always comes through with the help we we need. I could feel the MC's struggles and hopelessness in your story. I like how you ending it instead of just saying she was shocked, you rendered her speechless.

You might want to do more of a variation in presenting the next day. You could say the days of the week, Tues, Wed., etc. or you could say 'tomorrow', the second or third day or something like that. Just a suggestion.

God bless! LaVonne
11/13/15
Intriguing title and engaging story. You definitely kept me interested and communicated the emotions of the MC very well! It was an inspiring story!
11/16/15
I enjoyed this miracle story because I experienced a similar one. Very well written from beginning to end.
11/18/15
I thought you did a good job on this, and hope it places high on the judges' list.
God always has a way to provide when we lease expect it. True stories are always the best.I really liked how it ended. I had expected the balloon payment. I felt sorry for the MC plight especially watching the ex spending money for the new wife.
Lesliejean, Congratulations on your 10th place win in EC