The Official Writing Challenge
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Very interesting story! That must be some kind of conversation that followed that ending. I had to read carefully because of the broken English, but it does make your story more authentic.
The emotion the daughter brings to the story is so tangible! And when you deliver that left hook at the end! She's his daughter?!?! Great stuff here:) Btw I thought you pulled the dialect off quite nicely:) Then authenticity was plain.
*** 'THE authenticity was plain'
Enjoyed this!, especially the surprise ending!
Congrats trace! First week back in already a strong placing :-) this was an excellent piece and I'm excited to see the splash that your next entry makes :-)
Congratulations on ranking 3rd in your level and 15 overall! Happy Dance!