The Official Writing Challenge
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08/21/15
Very interesting story! That must be some kind of conversation that followed that ending. I had to read carefully because of the broken English, but it does make your story more authentic.
08/21/15
The emotion the daughter brings to the story is so tangible! And when you deliver that left hook at the end! She's his daughter?!?! Great stuff here:) Btw I thought you pulled the dialect off quite nicely:) Then authenticity was plain.
08/21/15
*** 'THE authenticity was plain'
08/24/15
Enjoyed this!, especially the surprise ending!
08/27/15
Congrats trace! First week back in already a strong placing :-) this was an excellent piece and I'm excited to see the splash that your next entry makes :-)
Congratulations on ranking 3rd in your level and 15 overall! Happy Dance!