The Official Writing Challenge
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Great story. The giant hand of God coming down to rescue the little girl and talking to her seemed a bit far-fetched, but I still liked it.
This was well-written. The end was a little trite, though. Maybe you could've done something other than having the girl talk to the hand. Or have her learn her lesson by her friend really being hurt. We don't always get the happy ending.
Keep writing - you have a gift for story telling.