The Official Writing Challenge
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Your disturbing story shows an end result, if anger and rage are allowed to fester. You showed the spiritual battle being raged here, too (Eph 6 verse "For our struggle is not against flesh and blood, but against the rulers, against the authorities, against the powers of this dark world and against the spiritual forces of evil in the heavenly realms.") My thoughts concerning your MC -- I have to remember that Jesus death was for all (that includes those that have sinned) and that puts me in the same sinner category.
Chilling, realistic and good dialog.
A little intense for me. Realistic dialogue. Good job of showing, not telling. Right on topic. Blessings,
Wow! The tension builds... and then the gruesome climax, toppling over into a satisfying and victorious end. Well done!! My only ink is not even pink, and involves the formatting. I didn't catch on to the sources of the "give and take" voices until the second part. Using italics might help. In no way does diminish my opinion of your writing. Excellent!
Congrats on your placement. Good writing.

God bless~
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The voices birthed from the father of lies... I know many people do not want to acknowledge or talk about the spiritual war that is going on around us all the time... but if you don't acknowledge the enemy, how can you defeat him. Sounds like a familiar theme these days. I like how your article brought this to light.