The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/15
This was certainly a somber tale. Wow. A lot going on in this piece and a lot to think about.

Good imagination and writing.

God bless~
02/01/15
Fantastic, powerful. So much emotion in this piece, and descriptions which vividly placed me there. Congratulations on an excellent piece of writing. Yay!
I was a little confused. I did not see how greed fit into either of the parent's lives. Their being poor did not point out greed to me.

However, it was an interesting life story in many homes
I felt for the characters, all of whom you brought to life very vividly. Great descriptive writing.
02/05/15
Well done
02/05/15
Well done
02/07/15
Congratulations on your high commendation. I think you nailed this piece.