The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/14
Your entry is so accurate in your descriptions of the broad spectrum of teachings that are prevalent in our world today.

Love is God and He is love...how is it that can lead to so many false ideas?

Your writing is clear and easy to follow and the message is very good. Thanks for sharing.
Wow. So powerful. I kept hoping Malik would show his pen pal the errors in his understanding, and lead him to Jesus. Sigh. We are limited to 750 words.

This should do well with the judges . . .

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May God continue to bless you with His holy purpose.

Hugs and prayers, Judi
09/09/14
You have an excellent style of writing and paint a vivid picture.

God bless~
Wow! The underlying subtle tones in this piece is brilliant. I wonder how often my complaining is so small in comparison. I liked how your MC almost felt the need to outdo his pen pal. That speaks volumes about the state of the States. We are blessed that our problems are little and naive about problems around the world. Even though our problems are little, if they are important to us, they are important to God.

You did a nice job in almost all of the judging criteria. In my opinion, your weakest area would be on topic. If you took that one line out, the rest of the story would still be spectacular, but not about cup and saucer. Ideally, if you removed topic words or lines, the story would fall apart because the topic should be woven throughout the entire story.

You did a great job of the beginning. You showed the conflict right away which made me want to read more. Your ending was great too. It leaves the reader with a sense of hope. You discussed some difficult topics, but handled them gracefully. Good job.