The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an interesting story about temptation. Everyone faces the same challenges but the books may be different.

Your characters are believable and the dialogue is well written.

Thanks for sharing.
Well written entry with a good message brought forward in the process. I think many will enjoy this story...great job!

God bless~
Congratulations on ranking 5th in your level and 30th overall. Happy Dance!
This is really a good piece. You do an amazing job of developing the characters. I think the only reason it didn't rank higher is because it was a tad weak on the topic. If you took out that one line, it wouldn't affect the story much. You did quite well on the other criteria though. I think you had a great flow, wonderful dialog and a message we all need from time to time.

God bless~