The Official Writing Challenge
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07/18/14
Enjoyed the characters and their reaction to their saved friend.
07/18/14
I enjoyed the sudden change in pace and tone when Gunner walked over to the table.
The story fits the challenge theme and the characters give a distinctive flavor. Some punctuation work would improve readability;that help can be found in the forums.Overall, well done.
07/20/14
Good descriptions of the men.
Interesting dialog.
Nice use of the topic.

I like it. Thanks for sharing.
07/22/14
Powerful and intensely realistic story theme. Well written and told. Nicely done!

God bless~
I enjoyed your rough and tumble characters. My favorite part was the dialog. It felt real and I could almost hear the twang in their voices.

The beginning started a bit slow. For me personally, I think the dialog gave me more insight into their personalities than the descriptions of tattoos and hair color.

I liked the ending a lot. You gave a sense of hope, but didn't Tie it up into a neat little bow. You did a fine job.