The Official Writing Challenge
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I read this to my 9 year old grandson and we enjoyed your entry very much.

I was drawn in from the first and wanted more all the way to the end.

Good ending and good message. Human nature can lead us wrong if we don't work to overcome it.
"Whenever we listen and heed the Spirit's leading, we will always have a happy ending." That's the wonderful message I received from your piece. Your story is a good example of how we as humans are so prone to the wrong tendencies. But through Christ, we can have the victory over our fleshly tendencies by following Jesus. Good piece of work!
I really liked this entry! It was well done and held clarity in which we should ponder. I think this was a well done piece.

God bless~
Congrats! God bless~
Congratulations on placing 5 in your level and 25 overall!! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)