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TITLE: Imprisoned Hearts | Previous Challenge Entry
By lynn gipson
02/19/13 -
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Hearts imprisoned cannot flee
Wardens harsh with anger
Existing in walls of danger
Stone cold beating without feeling
Harming others with their stealing
Bloodless chambers flow with starkness
Silent throbs in fear of darkness
Spirits cry with voiceless screams
Waking from their hellish dreams
Quaking with utter fear
No mortal ear will ever hear
Desperate souls yearn for liberty
Longing for lives of eternity
Clinging to each faint heartbeat
Refusing to accept defeat
From their hell a cry is heard
By One who travels with His word
A mercy door opens wide
Peace awaits the other side
Welcoming His grace and love
Hearts remove a battered glove
Releasing souls from prison's hell
Behind the walls wherein they dwell
Running from the past till caught
Bail by them could not be bought
Salvation at His price was found
By all who called to Him as bound
Christ appeared and paid their debt
A Savior's ransom to be met
There was but One to set them free
A pardoning Man who held the key
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I think the poem would benefit from a few, well-placed punctuation marks, even though it's traditional verse.
Your last line does a great job of complementing the first. The only "life" key we need is the one Jesus holds.
God bless~
God bless.
"Locked away without life's key
Hearts imprisoned cannot flee...
"There was but One to set them free
A pardoning Man Who held the key."
This was a very nicely flowing poem with a great message! You helped us feel the despair of the lost but then gave us all hope in Jesus!
Good job! :)
Great Job!