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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Embarrassment (01/12/12)
Imagine my embarrassment, if Jesus should arrive at my door step today. Would he be disappointed in my choice of music? Would he shun the television programs recorded on my DVR? Would he disapprove of my expensive clothing? Would he rebuke my loose language?

Imagine my shame, at Jesus loading the bus with believers from around the world, only to hold me off to the side. “I’m sorry,” he says. “I do not know you.”

Imagine the pain in my heart as I watch that enormous bus shut the doors, while I stand outside frantically pleading for mercy. I see my wife and children all staring at me through crystal clear glass windows. My youngest son is waving goodbye, with tears in his eyes.

Imagine my panic as I realize the depth of what’s happening before my eyes. As the bus slowly ascends into the clouds, I cry out for another chance to get it right. I yell for the Lord to wait for me.

Imagine my anger as I scream into the heavens, desperately trying to reason with God. “I read my Bible verse every day! I give a dollar to the homeless at least twice a month! I tythe when I receive overtime every other month! I go to church at least three times a year! I’m a good person!”

Imagine my denial, as I convince myself this is all just a dream. I’ve still got time to commit to the Lord. I’ll wake up in my bed any minute now, and find everything and everyone where they should be, in my life.

Imagine my surprise, as I wake to find my wife’s empty nightgown under the covers next to me; her wedding ring, dental fillings and necklace draped across the dented pillow. My children’s beds are empty, save for their own bed clothing. Even my Alaskan Malamute is gone. Outside, I hear screams as neighbors awaken to missing family members of their own.

Imagine my clarity, as I realize the dream was everything but. He came…and I waited too late to change.

Imagine you were me. Would you be ready?
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C D Swanson 
01/19/12
This was a well written story that was spot on with the topic. Nicely done.
God Bless you ~
harvestgal Ndaguba
01/19/12
Yes, I can imagine that. Awesome ending. I enjoyed this.
Edmond Ng
01/19/12
The feelings come through in your message. A well written and thought provoking piece. Excellent job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/20/12
The title is perfect. The repetition created the desired sense of urgency.
The only thing I might quibble on is the fact I would be embarrassed for I think the emotion would be so much more intense :Terror, Agony, Desperation. Though I certainly can see how some would see it as an embarrassment. It just didn't fit for me.

The beginning and ending were both really good and appealing. Your message is quite clear and you put a chill in my heart and I found myself re-examining my life and choices.
Hiram Claudio
01/20/12
I appreciate the willingness to paint such a clear, and in my opinion biblical sound, picture of the consequences tied to not embracing the Good News. A very good piece of writing and very sobering.

Thank you!
Linda Goergen
01/21/12
That would be worse than the worse nightmare you’ve ever had. Great story, well written, with a great message.
Nancy Bucca 
01/21/12
Though we all have our own point of view, I personally think this is a great take on embarrassment. To me it truly captures the terror, anxiety and frustration that go with being embarrassed. And I must say that embarrassment does carry with it a strong sense of terror. I know because I've been there. Embarrassment can evoke strong feelings of suicide, guilt and fear - depending on those before whom the embarrassment happens. So although this isn't at all a humorous take on the topic, it nevertheless does a great job of capturing the essence of embarrassment (in my opinion at any rate).

And it's a good warning to us all.
Leola Ogle 
01/23/12
God help us to daily examine our hearts, as your piece so poignantly addressed. God bless!
Theresa Santy
01/25/12
Nice flow, on topic, and very well said!

I can't tell you how wide I grinned when I read 'even my Alaskan Malamute was gone'.

Don't get me wrong. I'm not indifferent to the plight of the MC, getting left behind. I'm just so happy the Malamute did not :)

Fantastic message.



Noel Mitaxa 
01/26/12
A succinct and sobering challenge, though I feel that "embarrassment" is not a strong enough emotion to cover the scenario described in the dream.
Leola Ogle 
01/26/12
Congratulations Ennis! Well done!
C D Swanson 
01/26/12
Congrats on your HC Placement. God Bless~