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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)
One, two and three
thud, thud & thud
bricks upon bricks
Babel's rubble raises again.

I once used my fingers
then stored the answers in my head
grew into a calculator
now I google instead.

One, two and three
thud, thud & thud
bricks upon bricks.

Map books and rulers
arithmetic and thinking
all necessary for calculating distance
plug it in and bing.com you have your answer.

One, two and three
thud, thud & thud
bricks upon bricks.

Those lovely road maps
from a bygone era
getting directions
search.yahoo.com.

One, two and three
thud, thud & thud
bricks upon bricks.

Community nurses
neighbour's remedies
mother's wisdom
health problems, just ask.com.

One, two and three
thud, thud & thud
bricks upon bricks.

Anything, anything at all
forget the encyclopaedia
and other lowly things
lift your eyes up, altavista.com.

One, two and three
thud, thud & thud
bricks upon bricks.

Soon brainless
with stubby fingers
our dollar will read
'in Google we trust'.

Then one, two three
thud upon thud
Babelling bricks will fall
and search-engines will tower no longer.
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Date
C D Swanson 
10/21/11
This was an interesting read. I liked the reference to the "tower of babel"- A modern day proliferation of todays times. Good job.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/21/11
This is interesting and quite true, I liked how you showed times have changed.
Leola Ogle
10/22/11
Fun read, as well as thought provoking. I especially liked the line about how our dollar will soon read In Google We Trust. Very clever. God bless!
Terry Lee
10/22/11
I have often thought of the Internet as a second Tower of Babel, even though I contribute to the babble. I loved the imagery of brick upon brick. Nice adaptation of the topic
Patricia Protzman
10/22/11
Creative and on topic. I think we have already reached the point where many trust the internet as truth.
Linda Goergen
10/23/11
Amen! Great thought provoking poem! When mankind relies on knowledge more than God, though that knowledge may be flawed, the knowledge indeed becomes as Babel. Enjoyed this read!
Noel Mitaxa 
10/24/11
Creative and challenging use of simple rhythm and repetition. Well done.
Edmond Ng
10/25/11
I remember the altavista.com days, and the falling and rising of the different search engines. Nice take on the topic. An interesting poem.
Wilma Schlegel
10/29/11
I loved this.
I also thought about how the internet (all that information so many have put together) is like the tower of babel.
Very creative.
Yvonne Blake 
11/01/11
Great poem! Very creative!

I like how you showed the progression in each stanza. Your repeating stanza kept the beat and thoughts moving steadily on.

The conclusion was excellent.
Noel Mitaxa 
11/03/11
HC! Congratulations.