The Official Writing Challenge
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I like your poem a lot. Full of wisdom and well written!
Nicely written with a message so clear! I especially like the part about the other side of paradise which one day will come upon us and where no foot shall slip nor soul take a fall. May we all hearken to good advice and be aware of the slithering one who is always ready to ensnare us, especially if we unwittingly choose to build our own private Eden rather than follow closely the will of God.
I enjoyed this poem - its message, rich with vision! And your last stanza ends with a punch of truth, Satan doesn’t care which sin he can get us to taste of, he’ll feed us our fill of any he can get us to succumb to! Nicely done!
"for in this self-made earthly heaven
one soon gets buried in the muck." Isn't that the truth?!! Great job and very well-written!
Strong and perceptive insights into the deceitfulness of sin and the loser who designs it. Well done.