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Atmospheric writing with a soft, nostalgic touch. I loved the way you brought the globe into the picture to illuminate the reality of our forgiveness.
I enjoyed the way you presented this and the timeless truth it teaches. Well written with good dialog.
Oh I love this! What a wonderful way to describe how far God throws our sins. You did an excellent job with the characters and the dialog You managed to explain eternity in a way a child could understand. This is one of my favorites.
I love this.

I think the teacher spoke almost TOO "prim and proper" in her first paragraph. I think I would have used a few more contractions. But that is a very minor thing, and most a matter of personal taste than anything.

Great job. I loved the globe illustration.
I loved this story. The boy's feeling of guilt for cheating, the need for confession and finally forgiveness with consequences. It would make a great children's book.

The dialogue and globe illustration were well done. Although, I also think the teacher's first couple of sentences could use slight tweaking.
Loved their accents! I cracked up laughing whenever the kid mentioned "cracking his head open on the desk." :)

I noticed a few spots where a quotation mark had been left out or forgotten, but altogether it was a great story.

Clever title to fit with the great illustration you used. Well done!
Congratulations on your third place win.
Awesome story gets an awesome prize ... congrats on getting third place!!!
Congraulations on your third placing. Well done.
This story claimed a well deserved win. Loved Mr. Bailey and the MC's voice throughout this tender piece. I liked the 'stiffness' you gave to the teacher to contrast with your other characters. Great job.