The Official Writing Challenge
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I don't normally comment on pieces like this, but I was completely lost in reading this. Is this kind of symbolic? I'd be interested to know what this story is about.
Not sure I followed this one either. Might have been easier if you'd named your characters.

You have some really good descriptions, though.
This one was a little hard to follow, but this line made me giggle ...

After she done all the talking for an hour or so, I done started missing you and even one of the kids.

Hmmm...some good writing here. Like the others, I have to admit to feeling a bit lost. I'm still not sure if this was about an actual car ride or not. But you have some good thoughts. Keep writing!
I think this is a really deep piece. I liked your subtle sense of humor. Keep writing I think you could really take this a bit further to help clear up some if the confusion but I like what you've done thus far.