The Official Writing Challenge
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I like your creative setting as class assignment, which reminded me of an old poem...
"There's a simple sign;
You can tell with ease:
The younger the couple,
The tighter the squeeze!"
Well done.
I really like your take on the topic and I like your mc's observations. This was a well-written story which kept my interest from beginning to end.
Your ending was absolutely stunning. What a great message! I got a little bogged down in the beginning, but the paced picked up with a really great grand finale.
All very romantic. It might have been an idea to start your story off right in the mall and to fill in the context as the story progressed. The section in the mall was a lot more fun and it would have been great to devote some more space to it.
This would be an excellent and fun assignment to complete. You really drew me into your characters. I felt like I could have been following my parents when they were in their 30s.
Congratulations for placing 6th in your level and 19th overall!