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Sad commentary on what takes place in too many nations around the world. If this is a true story, glad for the happy ending.
Very cleverly written and interesting
Wow this is so intense. My heart breaks for that little girl inside. I noticed in the first line you used to instead of too but after that I was so taken in by the emotions it didn't matter. Great poem!
Very powerful. I was deeply moved. And thank you, for lifting me up with that perfect ending!
This is certainly an issue affecting many people in the world today. Just recently here in Mozambique we had to deal with a fourteen-year-old girl whom the family wanted to marry off. I suspect that with the line about bonnets and braids you picture a US or European location. I think it would have been helpful to develop the actual setting a little more clearly.
Too sad that this happens to innocent girls. Most of them don't have the chance to escape their intended fate. I'm glad that your MC did.