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You added quite a bit of excitement to the story. I felt like I was really there. My only thought is really insignificant, but the MC held his crucifix , is it too early in the formation of the church to have a crucifix? It really doesn't matter nor take away from the message, but I did find myself wondering.

I looked up the verse after I read your story and thought you did a great job of bringing it to life and making it understandable to all.
Very descriptive, nice literary touch. You brought excitement to the bbilical story. Bravo!
Well done, Debby! Congratulations for placing in your level! Great, great job.
Deborah, congrats on placing in the top fifteen in Level 3!

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