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By Melanie Kerr
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His house had changed in some strange way
Gadzooks! A carpet soft and thick
Of shades that he would never pick
The walls of summer sunshine blue
Had yellow stencilled flowers too
This room so alien and strange
A foul, unpleasant, frightening change
He visited each room and found
So many changes all around
The piercing clean and spotless smell -
It did not suit him very well
His cherished gems he could not find
No prized possessions left behind
His filth, his stench, his rubbish pile
And all those things he thought worthwhile
All was new and spanking clean
Nothing like how things had been
Alarmed, no cause for celebration
Grubwort knew t’was infestation
Invasion of this holy kind
Is something that all demons mind
He trembled in his demon skin
As dreadful thoughts swept over him
His “house”, the stronger man had met
Grubwort’s life - now under threat
His undeniable conviction -
He was facing sure eviction
He’d heard that others just like him
Had found the future very grim
Grubwort squawked a frightened squeak
He shook and shivered, shrilled a shriek
At once propelled beneath the sun
The stronger man the battle won
Before him Grubwort had to kneel
He fled with one last lingering squeal
Now Grubwort’s homeless, please beware
An open window – he’ll be there
To stay forever that’s his plan
To stop him call the stronger man
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One quibble, and I may well be wrong, but I think you need a comma on your final line after "To stop him" Otherwise the natural sense is that Grubwort needs to be stopped from calling the strong man.