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11/19/09
What a delightful story. I was right there, exhausted, in the chair and then caught up in Mike's enthusiasm. Thanks for sharing this.
11/19/09
What a delightful portrait of Mike's love for you! Well-written and engaging...makes me wish I could put the top down on my dream car! :-)
11/23/09
Spot on dialog told with such vivid economy of words.
11/24/09
I just knew he was going to buy it for her, but it didn't make the piece any less delightful. :) And yes, that area is absolutely beautiful....sunsets are the best!
11/24/09
How fun! I love when something can pull me out of that "after work funk" and into the world where dreams come true!
I loved your story! I so understand that exhaustion, and then suddenly, life returns! I could even feel the warm breeze on that afternoon. Great use of topic

This read so easily for me, and I was really anticipating a happy ending.
11/24/09
This is delightful--although the only VW Bug I ever had, I HATED.

Your dialogue is deft, and your characters very likeable!
Your characterization is top-notch and very believable. A delightful read.
11/24/09
Perfect title to a delightful tale.Good writing.
What a sweet and generous husband!
Where's your yellow topic?
Good writing on the dialogue, sounds very real!

I also enjoy the carpet of yellow daisy-like flowers, capeweed, spread all over our land in winter and spring!

I enjoyed your entry about Michael's enduring love (I, mean, endearing love) even after all the years of married life with his beautiful wife. Very sweet!

Cheers for sharing this lovely piece. Thank you.

11/26/09
Great interaction, energy and conversation between well-portrayed characters. Like Jan, I felt slightly let-down by the VW aspect, but thanks for the ride.