The Official Writing Challenge
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You gave us an interesting peek into the mind of your MC. Attention to small details made visualizing the story easy to do. I could clearly see him trying to dry our his newspaper, scrutinize the paperweight, resent not being able to order his own dinner. I like how at the end you bring us back to his paper. It was very 'real'.
I liked the for his family...sometimes you can't see the forrest for the trees. Glad his newspaper dries out enough to read.
Your descriptions are wonderful... the coffee soaking into the paper like syrup into pancakes. Your ending was great.. not quite ready for retirement. This made me smile. :)