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07/12/09
Oh my! I had to smile at the "hold your horses." That was so cute. I enjoyed all the idioms, especially "bought the farm". :) Your story is very heart-warming.
07/13/09
What is hoss-a-bull? Very, very choppy. Maybe a read thru by someone else to make sure the story flows. I think you had already said that Justin was your husband so another reference to that was not needed. The take on the conversations between grandfather and grandson was very good.
07/15/09
I found this to be a sweet and entertaining story. Loved the grampa-isms. Your title was perfect for the content here.

In a couple spots you went from past to present tense, so be careful to proofread before submitting--other than that, this earns a thumbs up from me.
Hi, to answer the question, what is a hoss-a-bull? It what a 6 year old calls a hospital. (In rememberance of my own son's language at that age). Coleene