The Official Writing Challenge
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You have the perfect "before and after," one that affected ALL mankind! Your beginning really drew me in, I had no idea where your story was going... then I felt like I was a witness to that event that changed the course of our world!
"No More Perfect Days" made a Bulls Eye hit on this week's topic. Literally! And the whole world's teeth, stomach, heart and soul still ache from that one bite of forbidden fruit. This story may be fiction - but it's none the less, sadly true. Nice job.
Great title and a very good take on the Garden AND the topic. You had lots of words to spare - I think you could have fleshed it out a little more, but that's my only critique. (Maybe I just wanted more of this good story to read.) I like the casual tone of the conversation and the unique POV. Nice!