The Official Writing Challenge
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Lovely story. Loved the descriptions of Maria especially. God bless, littlelight
I enjoyed the story. Good job! Freedom does indeed come within the heart.
A touching story of a wonderful journey -physical and spiritual.
It would be so interesting to talk to
Rosa now - years after finding "freedom." And thank God for relatives who share this freedom with their loved ones. A great story well done.
I like the story. What a great conclusion. I think there was too much crammed into the 750 words. We could have started with Rosa already in Manhattan and conflicted. Flashed back to the Aunt in the old country and then spent time on your wonderful conclusion. Still a lot of talent displayed here.
Your characterisation worked really well. Each one was real and different. A lot to pack into one challenge, it would be fun to see this expanded. Good story.
Yes, there is a lot crammed in here, including talent. When writing for the challenge, it makes it easier to get within the word count happily if you focus on one setting and one incident, keeping the characters from 1-3.