The Official Writing Challenge
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09/04/08
It could happen. Chilling and prophetic, or maybe it is happening already! Very well told.
09/08/08
Good portrayal of her change--her freedom.
09/08/08
You've given a glimpse of a very intriguing world here--have you written more stories set here? For a suggested improvement--I would have liked to see more detail about Cheri's interaction with Vic--maybe less about her getting him down to her apartment.
09/08/08
This was good! I would like to see where they go from here. Very good job of showing what was happenng.