The Official Writing Challenge
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You have an interesting view in your story of what might happen in the future. I like how you showed the Lord's will continuing through the "man of God."
Very interesting--I found the first part of this quite compelling.

The last two paragraphs seemed to sum up way too trying to tell a whole novel (or 600 years of history) in 200 words. It's hard to do sci-fi in ultra-short fiction.

It'd be great to have more character development of this man; he's a fascinating character.
I would have liked you to have inserted "How it happened" in place of the ***. It felt like the middle of the story was missing. You had words to spare.

What was there was good.