The Official Writing Challenge
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I felt sorry for Sissy, patiently waiting to no avail. Bobby didn't sound worth waiting for. Poor girl.
Poor Sissy. I liked the alternate thoughts - first of Bobby, then of Sissy. Telling a story through rhyming poetry is always a challenge.
Oh, very sad...I can just see her, sitting at her window.

I wasn't clear--did he leave, or did he die, or did he leave and then die? And I think you wanted "knew" instead of "new" in one place.

Very good poetic skills...this one reads like a ballad.
Good job telling a story in poetical form - I liked the alternating lines for Bobby and Sissy.
One thought for red ink - some of the rhyming lines sound a little awkward, such as "No letter did she sail." You might want to watch your rhymes and make sure your poem flows well...
Keep up the good work!