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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Hide and Seek (08/07/08)
You want me to do what, Lord? You are asking me to leave my family, all that is safe and familiar, and head off into a storm to do something completely against the nature You gave me, and totally out of my comfort zone. I know that I need not remind You that You control the storm, so if it is a problem, all You have to do is tell it to cease, and it will. So why do You want to involve me?

Yes, I know that your ways are higher than my ways, and your thoughts higher than my thoughts, but surely there is someone else who is better qualified to do this than I am.

So You don't call the qualified, You qualify the called. That is supposed to be a comfort to me?

You know, I have heard that there is a narrow channel to the west that connects this Great Sea with an even larger one... My family and I could use a little change of scenery...

Yes, I know that I cannot flee from your presence, even if I settle on the far side of the sea. There really isn't anyone else You could use? Okay, anyone else You will use?

And I do not suppose that it would be very wise to ask "or else?"

No, no. I am not refusing to go. I was just wondering aloud.

Was I drifting west? Well maybe just a little...

So I am this fellow's "or else?" Do I want to know what he didn't want to do?

Yes, I realize that is none of my concern. I was just wondering aloud...

Alright, I am going. Just let me say a quick farewell.

Family, friends, the Creator is sending me on a mission. I'm not sure how long it will take, but I will return as soon as I am able. That presumes that I am able.

Well, yes, I trust you, pretty much, but I'm just concerned about heading into the midst of this storm.

*****

Whoa! You didn't tell me I was going to have to dodge jettisoned cargo while waiting for dinner. Yes, yes, I know I am to swallow him whole, without harming him, though I am not sure what lounging in the remains of my last meal will do to him.

There he is! I am not sure this is going to work.

Yes, I know that nothing is impossible with You. Here goes!

(Gulp.) Ouch! He had to be one of your larger human specimens. That seaweed and hair tickle! I think I am going to be sick...

What do You mean, not yet? What is the plan at this point, anyway. You never said what I was to do after the rescue.

Wait. And just how long am I supposed to wait with this bloated belly?

Okay. I will chase my tail until further notice.

All that praying is making for a lot of air bubbles. (Burp.)

He repented, huh? And now, with this sagging belly, You want me to swim at top speed up the coast, dodging all those ships at the big port on the Great Sea end of the major trade route, and regurgitate him onto the beach?

I'm going.

*****

I hope this does not hurt as much in reverse... (Blurp.)

There! I hope you are satisfied. Am I free to go home now?

I am supposed to be happy that he repented? Well, I cannot say that I am. In fact, I think I am going to go find a nice place to sulk.

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Scripture references are drawn from Is. 55:9, Ps. 139:7-10, Luke 1:37, and of course, the book of Jonah.
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Joy Faire Stewart
08/16/08
I enjoyed Jonah's conversation with God. Then, I wasn't expecting the fish's point of view. Unique writing on the topic. Good job!
Ellen Dodson
08/16/08
Fun and interesting spin on this. : )
Jean Thornberry
08/19/08
You had me laughing throughout your story! Excellent twist with the whale talking to God! I didn't expect the whale to be the character. Was it the whale all the way through the story? I read it to be so.

This is one of my favorites! I love the line "are you satisfied?"

Keep writing!
Sara Harricharan
08/20/08
ROFL! What a hoot! This was hilarious read, especially from the whale's POV. I love the ongoing dialouge, it was fresh, funny and definitely the best twist. A favorite of mine for this week. Great writing! ^_^
Jan Ackerson
08/20/08
This is great! I love the bit where the giant fish is hoping it doesn't hurt as much in reverse. You have such a fresh and original sense of humor. Very clever!
Joshua Janoski
08/21/08
LOL. I almost missed this entry, and that would have been a shame.

At first I read this and thought "gee, that sounds like my conversations with God." Then I realized that this was the fish that swallowed up Jonah. Very nice twist! I loved the humor that you injected into this. Delightful, Holly!