The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked this entry -- it held my attention well. The ending was a bit choppy, but I did like the treasure that they found!
Great job keeping the reader guessing. I through from the beginning that the object was a Bible, then discovered it was a dog, then a map, then, finally--Yay!!--the Bible. I agree with the previous quote, the very end is a bit overdone. Be subtle but hopeful at the end. Good job!! : )
Hmmm, great twist here! I liked how it was a treasure hidden and how they did find it in the end! Neat! I was a little thrown off to learn of a granddaughter Sophie sixty years later, because I was still stuck in the suspense of the moment with the real Sophie. Otherwise, this was really good, I could see it being expanded into a full story! ^_^