The Official Writing Challenge
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08/08/08
You have some good thoughts in this free verse entry, "Man separated from his creator," " his life at best mundane, loathsome at worst. " and the man, "looking at his filthy clothes." Then the hopelessness "Is there really no way?" and then the hope, "bought him back, redeemed him." I like your ending (which sums up the gospel) , "In flesh there stands a way, a bridge."
I like the message being conveyed here. Very powerful. I don't know if I like how the words are arranged on the page, not sure if that was intentional or not, but it didn't detract much from what was being said. And the message being conveyed is what really matters most anyways. Thank you for sharing this!