The Official Writing Challenge
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08/03/08
I guessed it...before I reached the bottom! I like the short phrases, the "shaking" oneself to stay awake. That's how I feel in church sometimes, too.
Well done.
08/04/08
Very clever approach. Nicely done.
08/04/08
I can well relate to this person, trying hard to keep awake in a sermon. Not that the sermon is boring. Not that I am not interested. Just that tiredness can be overwhelming sometimes, just as it was to the young man in the story in Acts. Paul did not condemn the young man. He restored him....I liked your fashion of poetry...Very different, and hard to tell a story with poetry...Helen
You have beautiful phrases and thought in your free verse poem.
Couple of typos but a very entrancing piece, made me feel the sleepiness that the MC was fighting.