The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Very good story!
06/06/08
Wonderful missionary story!
I like the value and message of the story. I was slightly confused when reading it as to how it related to the subject, the Family Home. I do like the last paragraph and the Bible reference and it flowed nicely.
~Ree~
06/07/08
Well-written. I could feel the heat and sense the tension.
06/09/08
This is a very tenseful story. I could picture the weariness and strain and the uncertainty of the missionary. It is a good story, but I am not sure how it relates to the topic - the family home. But I guess as missionaries, one has a home wherever he is ministering. And I presume, in this case, the missionary and group were the reluctant guests....Very good...Helen
Oooh, good suspense! I was getting worried for a minute, that there might be an ambush, but this turned out just right! I enjoyed it! ^_^
I was nodding my head at all the truths found in this wonderful piece. And, to know that it is true only makes it that much richer. Great job, Angel. Loren
06/12/08
Great story, thank you so much for sharing! Extremely powerful message delivered throughout the narration.
06/12/08
Oh my goodness...what a scary moment. The descriptions are very vivid and I could especially visualize the dark walk through the rice paddy. The end is heart-warming.