The Official Writing Challenge
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I love the idea of this, and I really have a picture of what Dad was like by your descriptions of his idea heavenly mansion.

There are some errors in punctuation and a few typos--one more edit, especially for comma usage, might have been good.

This is a clever approach to this week's topic.
What a neat story! I loved getting to know the dad this way. With the descriptions, etc, it was such fun! Especially with the M&M part...^_^
This story has a unique approach. It was enjoyable. But, if you don't mind a few tips, before you post this story anywhere else, check the spelling, the punctuation, etc. You will notice that in a couple of places, a question mark would have helped, and a few commas to mark off phrases, etc....But keep writing. We all make mistakes, and it is only when we help each other that our writing improves. God bless you...Helen
I could almost hear this being read for an audio recording with a little music in the background. I love the prayer aspect of this heartwarming story. I especially enjoyed the lines about your Dad having a lap if there were kids that needed one. This was really nice to read.